Repressed Action

[Hannibal]

She was broken
But I didn't break her.
As much as I hate her
it wasn't from my fists.

[machinery]

not much here to look at. and really a piece that doesn't give the audience much. Who's she? Why is she broken? why would you want to break her? Why do you hate her?

first two lines: broken and break are repetitive.

first line and third line could use commas.

were you just putting this piece out or is there something behind it that you didn't express?

let me know.

[Hannibal]

It was just a quick blurb really...
Nothing spectacular, but I felt that the words "fit" into something...
yes - I know! Revise! Expand!
I will!
Promise.